OK - have written the birth scene. Now bearing in mind I never gave birth the 'usual' way - I had a c/s (although I did have 3 hours of contractions) - does this sound remotely realistic?
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Yana knelt on the bed, gripping the metal bed frame and groaning as the pain peaked almost unbearably before finally subsiding. She exhaled shudderingly as the pain rippled away and then tensed as she felt the next one begin almost immediately, breathing an inarticulate protest. She panted through the contraction, gritting her teeth and squeezing her eyes shut, dropping her head as she concentrated on the pain. She was vaguely aware that Robert was hovering around her but thankful that he made no effort to touch her. Flitting around the fringes of her physical pain, ready to insinuate itself into her conscious mind the moment the pain gave her any respite, was the agonising, terrifying thought that her baby probably would not survive – she knew it was too soon and babies born too soon almost always died – and hers was a full two moons too soon. Tears leaked down her cheeks and she almost welcomed the next contraction, the need to concentrate on the pain driving out all other thoughts and fears.
The woman dressed in blue was there again – speaking softly and gently. She felt fingers inside her and then the woman was at her head, nodding and smiling, speaking encouraging words. An overwhelming need to push gripped her as her muscles conspired to rid her body of the small interloper which had made it its home for the past seven months. A new pain, a hot burning pain, made itself felt and the woman took Yana’s hand and guided it downwards – Yana sobbed as she felt the warm rounded head of her baby under her fingers. She took a deep breath and pushed, screaming as the pain crested and she felt the head slither out. She panted briefly, resting, before the next contraction came. This one was almost easy, the rest of the tiny body slid out into the woman’s waiting hands, and Yana slumped on the bloody bed, her eyes closed, her face turned away from Robert.
She heard talking, a small commotion in the corner of the bland room and shut her ears, curling up on her side and pulling the thin blanket over her. She felt a touch on her shoulder and turned her head to see the woman in blue holding a small bundle in her arms. She shook her head, she didn’t want to see her dead baby – she just wished they’d take it away – but she realised the woman was smiling gently. She glanced at Robert, who was nodding at her proudly, his face almost splitting with his smile. And then – then she heard the barest whimper and sat up suddenly, her heart suddenly racing with an awful hope. The woman pulled back the blue blanket and Yana stared in awe at the tiniest baby boy she had ever seen – his little head turned, his fist came up to his mouth and small noises issued from his mouth.
Yana held out her arms wordlessly and the woman put her son into them. Yana stared at him, his chest rising gently with each incredible breath. He was alive – miraculously, wonderfully, he was alive! His softly rounded cheek begged for a caress and Yana’s finger gently traced the irresistible curve. He was so beautiful, his long thick lashes lay on his smooth skin like the frayed edge of finest black silk. His fine hair framed the perfect contours of his face, calm in blissful repose. Yana’s body was almost ready to burst with the love she suddenly felt flooding her being. She wanted to scream it from the windows, to grab people and forcibly make them come and look at him and say “Look – isn’t he gorgeous!” at them until they agreed, if only to get away from the mad woman.
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First draft - be kind.
