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Katpo

10-10-2005 09:51 PM

What's wrong with this sentence?

Quote:

DALLAS -- Dallas police arrested Sunday night a man accused in a fatal beating in downtown Dallas, where up to 100 people possibly saw the crime occur.

This brilliant quote is from our illustrious local NBC affiliate. I get more irritated with them every day! My junior high journalism teacher would have failed me for writing a sentence like that.

If anyone needs a job and has at least a sixth grade education, move to Dallas and apply for a job at http://www.nbc5i.com. I've written to them so many times about errors that I'm sure they cringe when they see my name.

aghiowa

10-10-2005 10:19 PM

Wow, could it BE more confusing and awkward? I agree, that's horrible!

Angela

happydaisy

10-10-2005 10:22 PM

Wow, that actually made my head hurt! :lol:

Froufy

10-10-2005 11:19 PM

Peter Piper picked a peck of pickled peppers while popping popcorn in a pot...news at eleven.

aghiowa

10-11-2005 09:18 AM

:rofl:

Angela

Itryharder

10-11-2005 09:41 AM

Yay! I love that quote. It makes my day. There are so many wrong items in the sentence, it's hard to know where to start. I think my favorite is that up to 100 people possibly saw the attack. So, what was it? Did 87 people see the attack and 13 close their eyes? Love it!
Itry

ontarget

10-11-2005 05:25 PM

kathy, i'll bet david fenfrock would never talk like that, don't you?

Katpo

10-11-2005 07:58 PM

Never! Maybe they should have him proofread the website? :lol:

ontarget

10-11-2005 11:21 PM

:lol:

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