General chatter - Anyone want to read my fantasy/romance story in process?

Whoops. I meant "In PROGRESS". lol.

Would anyone be interested in reading my young adult fantasy/romance novel? I have seven chapters up so far, which is around 13k. It's written in a very casual, natural voice that makes it quick to read.

The protagonist is a very self-conscious girl that is overweight and shy. As the story goes, though, she will become more sure of herself and of her abilities.

It starts out in a high school setting, but since it's a fantasy story it will eventually change to a more fantastical setting with magical creatures and such. I don't want to give too much away in case any of you are interested. I post it at storywrite.com

Here is the link to the first chapter: http://storywrite.com/story/7980765-Paradise:_Prologue_and_Chapter_One-by-Ghost_of_a_Siren

You may skip the prologue if you wish. I was thinking of omitting it.

At the very end of each chapter (before the comments) you will find a link to the next chapter under "Author's Notes".

Please be honest. I have learned to take constructive criticism as helpful suggestions. :)

What are your plans for this novel? You may not want to make your works public before you've had them copywrited.

Good point, Joy.

I'll try and meander over there and read.

What are your plans for this novel? You may not want to make your works public before you've had them copywrited.


Written work falls under copywrite as soon as you write the first word. The only advantage to an official copywrite is to provide evidence of who wrote the words first. Making them public actually works in your favor, in this regard.

Only the original, creative parts of the work are copywritable, so someone could in theory copy some of your plot elements, but that's not nearly the problem people assume. You could give 30 writers the same plot, down to character names and specific events, even the ending, and each would write a very different story, and reading one wouldn't necessarily detract from all of the others. The book "Steal this Plot: A Writer's Guide to Story Structure and Plagiarism," by June Noble illustrates this well.

That being said, some editors might be reluctant to publish a work that is essentially available free online, so you might consider leaving only partial excerpts from your chapters rather than the whole chapter, at least after a specific point. I don't think having chapters 1-3 would be a detriment, and could even work in your favor, especially if there's some way to document how many visitors are reading the work, and if your work is getting noticed.

Oh, I plan to leave out the last 10 or so chapters. Yes, storywrite copywrites and documents how many views it has. Thanks for your interest.

I'm hooked!!

Let me/us know when there's more!!

As a grown woman with an embarrassing affinity for YA fiction, I can tell you I would totally keep reading to see where this goes!

I enjoyed my read :)

Awww, thanks, everyone! That makes me feel good. :D

Ch. 8 posted. Hope it's still good.

http://storywrite.com/story/8727341-Paradise:_Chapter_Eight-by-Ghost_of_a_Siren

Yes, its still good and leaving me wanting more!

Ch. 8 posted. Hope it's still good.

http://storywrite.com/story/8727341-Paradise:_Chapter_Eight-by-Ghost_of_a_Siren

I think you have a really good story unfolding here. It keeps me engaged and interested. I read your Ch. 8 on storywrite and left you a comment. Love that site. I just posted a rough draft prologue of a story I am messing around with on there today.

Oh, thanks. I'll add you as a friend, RiverWind, and check out your prologue. :)

New Chapter. It's a bit rough. Any suggestions would be helpful. http://storywrite.com/story/8735983-Paradise:_Chapter_Nine__Very_Rough_-by-Ghost_of_a_Siren